LEVEL U Prep1 WRITING Name UPrep 1.
FINAL EXAM Practice Family Given Nickname
Time: 75 minutes
Directions: You have 75 minutes to write the introduction and the problem paragraph for a problem/solution essay about:
Young people / driving accidents
I. Introduction paragraph, including thesis
- Thesis
II. Problem paragraph
A. Supporting idea 1
B. Supporting idea 2
III. Solution (do not write the solution paragraph)
IV. Conclusion (do not write the conclusion)
V. References (do not write the reference page)
In the problem paragraph, use:
- ONE direct quote for one of the supporting ideas andONE paraphrase for the other. (Use onlytwo of the following four sources. Do NOT use all four.)
Source 1.
Author:Rodenburg, Todd
Title:Vehicle Accident Awareness
Publication Date:??
Page:1
While only 13% of licensed drivers were aged 16-24, 24% of fatalities and 26% of those seriously injured were 16 to 24 years of age. / Source 2.
Author:Jane Ravens
Title: Living Within Your Means
Publication Date:15 March 2014
Page:99
Peer pressure/Distractions
The presence of teen passengers increases the crash risk of unsupervised teen drivers. This risk increases with the number of teen passengers.
Source 3.
Author:Andan Waller and Kristie Friesen
Title:Car Accidents: The Unfortunate Truth
Publication Date: 2013
Page: 3
Bad example or bad role models
Parents of crash-involved teenagers are more likely to have a poor driving record than those of crash-free teens. They have had more crashes and received more tickets. / Source 4.
Author:no author
Title:Costly Mistakes of Teensin the US
Publication Date:2004
Page:15
The 2002 cost of crashes involving drivers ages 15 to 20 was $40.8 billion
NOTE: The citation info is invented; the quotes are real. The actual source info is on the next page.
When I was 16, I got my driver’s license, and I usually drove my mother’s car to school rather than take the bus. One morning I was a bit late for school, so I was driving a bit fast on the highway. Unfortunately, it was also raining. I went to change the radio station, and my tire went off the road. I quickly turned steering wheel and went to other side of the road. I thank God that no car was coming, or I might not be here today. I clearly didn’t have the experience I needed to drive in various weather conditions. I am not unique. I know many people who had accidents when they were young and some even died. In fact, this has probably been happening since cars were invented. It is a common situation that teenagers cause or are involved in serious traffic accidents; with extra training and more supervision, these accidents could be reduced.
Car accidents among teens has become a critical issue. The major reason why teenagers frequently have car accidents is their lack of experience. Although young people must take driver’s education class, where they learn the rules and get some training, this often isn’t enough. They also need the guidance of other adults, such as their parents. Unfortunately, some parents don’t have enough skill themselves. Waller and Friesen (2013) reported that if a teen has a car accident, it is quite likely that their parents experienced accidents themselves, got tickets for speeding, and had driving records that weren’t very good, compared to teens who never have an accident (p. 3). Children often consider their parents as role models. If the parents are not careful drivers, it makes sense that the children will act in a similar way and get into accidents. This lack of training leads to more accidents for young people if they are compared to the general population. “While only 13% of licensed drivers were aged 16-24, 24% of fatalities and 26% of those seriously injured were 16 to 24 years of age” (Rodenburg, n.d., p. 1). Statistically, it would be expected that the percentage of serious accidents causing death or injury would be much closer to 10%. Since the percentage is actually so high, this points to the seriousness of the issue. Something must be done in order to reduce the number of accidents that teen drivers experience.
When I was 16, I got my driver’s license, and I usually drove my mother’s car to school rather than take the bus. One morning I was a bit late for school, so I was driving a bit fast on the highway. Unfortunately, it was also raining. I went to change the radio station, and my tire went off the road. I quickly turned the steering wheel and went to other side of the road. I thank God that no car was coming, or I might not be here today. I clearly didn’t have the experience I needed to drive in various weather conditions. I am not unique. I know many people who had accidents when they were young and some even died. In fact, this has probably been happening since cars were invented. It is a common situation that teenagers cause or are involved in serious traffic accidents; with extra training and more supervision, these accidents could be reduced.
Car accidents among teens has become a critical issue. The major reason why teenagers frequently have car accidents is their lack of experience. Although young people must take driver’s education class, where they learn the rules and get some training, this often isn’t enough. They also need the guidance of other adults, such as their parents. Unfortunately, some parents don’t have enough skill themselves. Waller and Friesen (2013) reported that if a teen has a car accident, it is quite likely that their parents experienced accidents themselves, got tickets for speeding, and had driving records that weren’t very good, compared to teens who never have an accident (p. 3). Children often consider their parents as role models. If the parents are not careful drivers, it makes sense that the children will act in a similar way and get into accidents. This lack of training leads to more accidents for young people if they are compared to the general population. “While only 13% of licensed drivers were aged 16-24, 24% of fatalities and 26% of those seriously injured were 16 to 24 years of age” (Rodenburg, n.d., p. 1). Statistically, it would be expected that the percentage of serious accidents causing death or injury would be much closer to 10%. Since the percentage is actually so high, this points to the seriousness of the issue. Something must be done in order to reduce the number of accidents that teen drivers experience.
It is a common situation that teenagers cause or are involved in serious traffic accidents; with extra training and more supervision, these accidents could be reduced.
I. Causes of accidents
A. Poor role models
B. Distractions
There are several main factor leading to more car accidents among young people. One of the simplest reasons that teens may drive poorly is a lack of good role models. Although young people must take driver’s education class, where they learn the rules and get some training, this often isn’t enough. They also need the guidance of other adults, such as their parents. Unfortunately, some parents don’t have enough skill themselves.Waller and Friesen (2013) reported that if a teen has a car accident, it is quite likely that their parents experienced accidents themselves, got tickets for speeding, and had driving records that weren’t very good, compared to teens who never have an accident (p. 3). Children often consider their parents as role models. If the parents are not careful drivers, it makes sense that the children will act in a similar way and get into accidents.
There are several main factor leading to more car accidents among young people. One of the simplest reasons that teens may drive poorly is a lack of good role models. Children often consider their parents as role models. If the parents are not careful drivers, it makes sense that the children will act in a similar way and get into accidents.Waller and Friesen (2013) reported that if a teen has a car accident, it is quite likely that their parents experienced accidents themselves, got tickets for speeding, and had driving records that weren’t very good, compared to teens who never have an accident (p. 3).Although young people must take driver’s education class, where they learn the rules and get some training, this often isn’t enough. They also need the guidance of other adults, such as their parents. Unfortunately, some parents don’t have enough skill themselves. In addition to bad role models, distractions are another significant reason for teen accidents. Some many things in a car can reduce the driver’s focus. Of course, there’s the radio, lights, and cell phones. However, there are also the passengers themselves. It’s fun for teen driver to take their friends with them. Unfortunately, the result can be deadly. “The presence of teen passengers increases the crash risk of unsupervised teen drivers. This risk increases with the number of teen passengers” (Ravens, 2014, p. 99). Sometimes the passengers chat or argue with the driver, and other times the passengers might encourage the driver to do stupid things, like speed or pass with it’s not safe.
You will be marked on:
- Your ability to write a well-developed introduction with an appropriate thesis statement.
- Your ability to construct a coherent, well-developed problem paragraph
- Your ability to use quotes/paraphrases as support, making sure that they are:
- appropriately introduced,
- cited properly using the APA format discussed in class, and
- commented on.
NOTE: You may use your own English/English dictionary and thesaurus.
Evaluation of the Final Writing Exam:
Here are the actual sources for the quotes used in this exercise.
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Extra.
Police reports of almost 2,000 crashes in which newly licensed drivers were involved pointed to inexperience as the major contributor