Written Assignment: Example 2 (HL)

Written assignment: Example 2 (HL)

Examiner comments

Criterion A: Language

A wide range of vocabulary is used accurately with few significant errors. Some complex sentence structures are clear and effective.

Criterion B: Content

Connection with the literary work is good with some evidence of organization. It is quite evident that the student understands Dr Rivers’ character profile and attempts to reveal his inner struggle to make it more central in the novel. The language used does emulate that of Dr Rivers in the actual work despite it not being mentioned in the rationale. However, the level of intimacy and register adopted are unconvincing.

Criterion C: Format

The text type is neither convincing nor effective. Is the language used semi-formally intended to be so between two professional psychiatrists? If so, this should be mentioned in the rationale. What’s more, the way thoughts flow and ideas are presented direct towards a diary entry format more than that of a letter.

Criterion D: Rationale

The aim is mentioned in the rationale but is not convincingly justified. The student does not, for example, explain why “Rivers must express his thoughts on paper” or why this letter would make “a great ending to the novel”.

Written assignment: Example 3 (HL)

Examiner comments

Criterion A: Language

A wide range of vocabulary is used accurately with few significant errors. Some complex sentence structures are clear and effective.

Criterion B: Content

Connection with the literary work is good with clear evidence of organization. The student fully understands Orwell’s underlying message and point made, but he or she deliberately attempts to present Winston retaining individuality despite everything.

Criterion C: Format

The text type is recognizable, effective and convincing.

Criterion D: Rationale

The rationale is clear and directly linked to the source. Having Winston commit suicide with the intention of proving there is still hope reveals not only the student’s creativity but also his or her clear aim, which is developed and achieved and portrays understanding of the overall work.

Written assignment: Example 4 (HL)

Examiner comments

Criterion A: Language

A wide range of vocabulary is used accurately with few significant errors. Some complex sentence structures are clear and effective.

Criterion B: Content

Connection with the literary work is good and does reveal good knowledge of Julia’s behaviour patterns. The student seems to be rereading Julia’s actions from a different perspective than that presented by Orwell, which is effectively produced in the diary entry.

Note: If the examiner is not familiar with 1984, there is nothing in the rationale to lead him or her to fully understand the student’s aim and he or she might end up considering the connection with the literary work adequate rather than good. This highlights the importance of students providing a clear and focused rationale that would help in their assignments being marked effectively.

Criterion C: Format

The text type is recognizable and convincing. Usual diary entry form is used effectively.

Criterion D: Rationale

The aim is stated in the rationale.