English 12 --- Lord of the Flies
For each of the following explain what is gained by Golding’s choice of words.
Golding: Within the diamond haze of the beach something dark was fumbling along.
Could have written: Within the shining haze of the beach something was stumbling along.
Golding: The great rock loitered, poised on one toe, decided not to return, moved through the air, fell, struck, turned over, leapt droning through the air and smashed a deep hole in the canopy of the forest.
Could have written: The great rock smashed a deep hole in the forest.
Golding: He was a shrimp of a boy, about six years old, and one side of his face was blotted out by a mulberry-coloured birth mark.
Could have written: He was a shrimp of a boy, about six years old, and one side of his face was disfigured by a mulberry-coloured birthmark.
Golding: To keep a clean flag of flame flying on the mountain was the immediate end and no one looked further.
Could have written: To keep the fire going was the immediate end and no one looked further.
Golding: From the pig run came the quick, hard patter of hoofs, a castanet sound, seductive, maddening --- the promise of meat.
Could have written: From the pig run came the quick hard patter of hoofs, frustrating --- the promise of meat.
Golding: Their scent spilled out into the air and took possession of the island.
Could have written: Their scent permeated the air.
Golding: The time had come for the assembly and as he walked into the concealing splendours of the sunlight he went carefully over the points of his speech.
Could have written: The time had come for the assembly and as he walked into the bright sunlight he went carefully over his speech.
Using expressive language, write a sentence for 3 of the following:
English 12 --- Lord of the Flies
For each of the following explain what is gained by Golding’s choice of words.
1. Golding: The clouds were sitting on the land; they squeezed, produced moment by moment, this close, tormenting heat. (152)
Could have written: The clouds were low; they produced this close heat.
2. Golding: At once the crowd surged after it, poured down the rock, leapt on to the beast, screamed, struck, bit, tore. (168)
Could have written: At once the crowd followed after it, down the rock, leapt on the beast.
3. Golding: One had to sit, attracting all eyes to the conch, and drop words like heavy round stones among the little groups that crouched or squatted. (86)
Could have written: One had to sit, attracting all eyes to the conch, and say things to the little groups that crouched or squatted.
4. Golding: Passions beat about Simon on the mountain-top with awful wings. (78)
Could have written: Passions flared around Simon on the mountain-top.
5. Golding: Ralph pushed the idiot hair out of his eyes and looked at Piggy. (156)
Could have written: Ralph pushed his hair out of his eyes and looked at Piggy.
6. Golding: He knelt down and the arrow of the sun fell on him. (146)
Could have written: He knelt down and the sun fell on him.
7. Golding: The sow collapsed under them and they were heavy and fulfilled upon her. (149)
Could have written: The sow collapsed under them.
8. For three of the following write sentences using expressive language:
school
snow
car
time
sun
heat
curiosity
jealousy