TS: Topic Sentence : Harry Potter Is a Champion to Many of the More Insecure Students

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Harry Potter is a champion to many of the more insecure students at Hogwarts. For example, when Draco Malfoy takes Neville’s Rememberall, Harry gets it back. He cannot stand someone who picks on others. He wants to protect the vulnerable. Harry is a hero to the less fortunate.

TS: Topic Sentence: Harry Potter is a champion to many of the more insecure students at Hogwarts.

CD: Concrete Detail: For example, when Draco Malfoy takes Neville’s Rememberall, Harry gets it back.

CM: Commentary: He cannot stand someone who picks on others.

CM: Commentary: He wants to protect the vulnerable.

CS: Concluding Sentence: Harry is a hero to the less fortunate.

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Harry Potter is a champion to many of the more insecure students at Hogwarts. For example, when Draco Malfoy takes Neville’s Rememberall, Harry gets it back. He cannot stand someone who picks on others. He wants to protect the vulnerable. Harry is a hero to the less fortunate.

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In Romeo and Juliet by William Shakespeare, Friar Lawrence is partly responsible for the tragic and senseless deaths of the star-crossed lovers. For example, when Romeo asks him for help after meeting Juliet at the Capulets’ party, the Friar marries them without telling their parents. He hopes to stop the generations-long feud that has been plaguing and poisoning the town, but his secrecy dooms his plan. Troubled by the animosity between the warring houses and determined to unite the families, he does not anticipate the tragic consequences of his decision. In addition, after he sends a letter to Romeo explaining his plan to give Juliet a potion, he leaves her in the tomb when he realizes Romeo is dead. Afraid for his own reputation, he is willing to abandon Juliet rather than stop further tragedy. His selfish desire to save his own skin leads to the grievous loss of an innocent and heartbroken girl and the boy who loved her. Friar Lawrence must accept part of the blame for the devastation that occurs.

TS: Topic Sentence: In Romeo and Juliet by William Shakespeare, Friar Lawrence is partly responsible for the tragic and senseless deaths of the star-crossed lovers.

CD: Concrete Detail: For example, when Romeo asks him for help after meeting Juliet at the Capulets’ party, the Friar marries them without telling their parents.

CM: Commentary: He hopes to stop the generations-long feud that has been plaguing and poisoning the town, but his secrecy dooms his plan.

CM: Commentary: Troubled by the animosity between the warring houses and determined to unite the families, he does not anticipate the tragic consequences of his decision.

CD: Concrete Detail: In addition, after he sends a letter to Romeo explaining his plan to give Juliet a potion, he leaves her in the tomb when he realizes Romeo is dead.

CM: Commentary: Afraid for his own reputation, he is willing to abandon Juliet rather than stop further tragedy.

CM: Commentary: His selfish desire to save his own skin leads to the grievous loss of an innocent and heartbroken girl and the boy who loved her.

CS: Concluding Sentence: Friar Lawrence must accept part of the blame for the devastation that occurs.

TS CD CM CS

In Romeo and Juliet by William Shakespeare, Friar Lawrence is partly responsible for the tragic and senseless deaths of the star-crossed lovers. For example, when Romeo asks him for help after meeting Juliet at the Capulets’ party, the Friar marries them without telling their parents. He hopes to stop the generations-long feud that has been plaguing and poisoning the town, but his secrecy dooms his plan. Troubled by the animosity between the warring houses and determined to unite the families, he does not anticipate the tragic consequences of his decision. In addition, after he sends a letter to Romeo explaining his plan to give Juliet a potion, he leaves her in the tomb when he realizes Romeo is dead. Afraid for his own reputation, he is willing to abandon Juliet rather than stop further tragedy. His selfish desire to save his own skin leads to the grievous loss of an innocent and heartbroken girl and the boy who loved her. Friar Lawrence must accept part of the blame for the devastation that occurs.