This Assignment Is Composed of Several Parts

Essay Assignment: “The Three Little Pigs: The Wolf’s Story” Ned Jensen (abridged)

This assignment is composed of several parts:

1. Using the rubric, evaluate the essay The 3Lil’ Pigz; check boxes on the rubric and provide a mark out of 20.
2. On a separate piece of paper, please list the categories on the rubric which are listed – conventions, word choice, sentence fluency, voice, organization, and content – and provide notes on areas of strength or weakness that justify your answers; these can be in bullet form.
3. Using the essay outline, prep for rewriting the essay.
4. Rewrite the essay – not your own – making corrections that you believe will move the essay up the scale. You must use the essay provided as your basis.
5. You must provide an estimated mark for your rewritten essay with a rationale.

The assignment will be evaluated as follows:

1. Does your evaluation make sense in reference to content and the notes made? (10)
2. Is your outline complete and does it make sense? (5)
3. Your essay will be marked according to the rubric. (20)

The 3 Lil’ Pigz

Selfish people tend to do selfish things. Take the three little pigs for example, there was a very ill wolf living in the woods near their village. Without a dime to his name, or a single drop of energy to hunt for food he walked to the village where the three little pigs lived. All he wants was a place to stay for a couple days and something to eat just to get himself back on his feet, but no, the three little pigs were too selfish to even stop and think of anyone but themselves for just a minute, and help the ill wolf out. Instead of doing the right thing, like listening to what the wolf had to say instead of running off to their brother’s houses, to play a card game at that, even forgetting to call the authorities. What’s the worst that could have happened to them?

If someone who was very ill was knocking on your door asking for a day or two of shelter and food to pull themself together just to survive you would probably let them in, right? Well there were these three lucky little pigs who had inherited a lump sum of cash, enough to build individual houses for each of them actually, were just too selfish to help someone in need out. They could have easily at least let him come in to warm up, but they were caught up in their own world and couldn’t come off it for even a minute to listen to what the wolf had to say.

If you’re scared enough to run out of your house because a wolf was knocking at your door the first thing on your mind should be to call the authorities. This situation easily could have been handled by the police because unlike the pigs, they would stop and listen to what the wolf had to say. Although the wolf is big and scary, he was having problems, and was on the verge of death, and nobody deserves to die alone, or even die at that. Because of the pigs selfish acts, the wolf passed.

The wolf didn’t mean to scare the pigs, and he definitely didn’t mean to blow there houses down, he was actually polite. The pigs all jumped to conclusions and ran off. There was obviously something wrong with the wolf if he was sneezing hard enough to blow their houses down. The pigs couldn’t look past his scary looks for just a second, they were just too scared and selfish.

Selfish people tend to do selfish things. Just because you don’t like the way someone looks, or acts doesn’t mean they are not a good person, if they have something to say to you, take a second and stop and listen to what they have to say. It could be important, how would you feel if you found out you were the reason for someone’s death ?

“The Three Little Pigs: The Wolf’s Story” – Ned Jensen (abridged)

Once upon a time in a quiet country village, there lived three little pigs. They were the luckiest swine in the country. They had just inherited enough money from their grandfather to build three new houses.

The first little pig wanted a warm and cozy house that would help him to relax. He built his house out of straw, the warmest and most familiar material he knew. The second little pig loved to shock the neighbours, so he picked sticks for materials and built a modern house. The third little pig, who planned for any imagined disaster, built a sturdy house of bricks and mortar.

Not far off in the cold, damp forest lived a poor, old wolf. He lived in a rotten, hollow log and searched the forest for whatever food he could find. He had no money – not a single cent—to build a house or plant a garden. Unlike most wolves, he was a vegetarian.

When winter arrived, it was extremely bitter and harsh. The wolf ate so little that he became weak and caught a terrible cold. Soon he was constantly sniffling and sneezing. He sneezed so hard that he blew dried leaves off the forest’s trees.

The sickly wolf left the forest in search of food and shelter. He sniffled and sneezed as he traveled down the road. With each sneeze, the snow whirled into a white cloud around his frostbitten ears.

After walking for several hours, the old wolf came upon the quaint village where the three pigs lived. Being so very cold and so very hungry, he hurried to the nearest house as fast as his stiff body could carry him.

He knocked on the straw door. He hoped that whoever lived there would take pity on him and let him come inside.

Before the timid little pig could reach the door, the wolf began to sneeze and sneeze. To the wolf’s surprise, he sneezed so hard that he blew the straw house apart. The frightened little pig thought the wolf wanted to eat him, so he hurried off to his brother’s house.

In a trembling voice, the pig warned his brother about the wolf who had blown down his house. They quickly locked the door and hid under a bed.

The wolf followed the pig to the stick house, desperate after destroying his first chance at food and shelter.

“Please, oh please, give me something to eat and a warm place to rest,” he pleaded.

The two pigs remained hidden under the bed, fearing for their lives. Once again the old wolf began to sneeze and sneeze. His sneezing shook the house of sticks. Three more sneezes and the house fell down. The two panicked pigs ran off over the hill to their brother’s house of bricks.

Their brother was sure the wolf couldn’t destroy his house. To be on the safe side, the pigs locked the doors and windows and hid in the safest room.

When the two brothers had calmed down a bit, the three pigs sat down to a game of cards. The wolf again came begging for food and shelter. He was delirious. The weather and illness had sapped his strength.

One last time, the wolf began to sneeze and sneeze. The brick house stood strong, but the wolf teetered until a final sneeze made him collapse in the drifting snow.

The wolf lay there drifting in and out of consciousness. He could hear faint laughter from inside the house and smell the mouth-watering aroma of freshly brewed coffee; it was these sounds and scents that carried him to oblivion, one hour after the pigs had decided to play cards.

By the time the pigs remembered to call the authorities, it was too late for the paramedics to do anything. If they had called for help instead of playing cards, or even just looked out their window and realized that their “attacker” was physically ill, the old stranger could have been helped; the eldest pig, however, simply started the coffee.

Essay Topic: The three little pigs are extremely selfish.

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