Hero Essay

Response Sheet #1

Writer ______Response Partner ______

Colored Pencil color ______

TASK: Switch response sheets and hero essays with a partner in class. Carefully follow the directions listed below and make all corrections, comments and additions on the writer’s paper. USE A COLORED PENCIL!

Introduction

___Underline the writer’s hook. DESCRIBE their hook below:

______

___Underline the thesis.

___The thesis should be the last line of the first paragraph. Write a note if it is not.

___The thesis should be ONE SENTENCE. Write a note to the author if it is not.

___LABEL THE THESIS with #1 where function is addressed, #2 where example is addressed, and #3 where negation is addressed.

___How many sentences are between the hook and the thesis? ______(should be 3-4)

Body Paragraph 1: Function

___Underline the topic sentence.

___Topic sentence introduces everyday hero either by name or role.

___The relationship between the author and the everyday hero is described.

___The first trait that this everyday hero possesses is______.

___The writer describes this trait in detail. Circle one.YESOR NO

___The second trait that this everyday hero possesses is ______.

___The writer describes this trait in detail. Circle one.YESOR NO

___Underline the concluding sentence.

___Do all sentences align with topic sentence? Draw a line through anything that doesn’t go with the topic sentence.

Body Paragraph 2: Example

___Underline the topic sentence.

___Topic sentence introduces “textual” heroes by name and trait.All three should be from text.

___Hero # 1 is ______. His/her heroic trait is ______.

___Does the writer give background information about this hero? If not, note on his/her draft.

___The first quotation has quotation marks. If not, note on his/her draft.

___The quotation is cited appropriately. (SpringBoard page#).

___The writer made a detailed connection from this quote to topic sentence.

Circle one.YESOR NO

___Hero # 2 is ______. His/her heroic trait is ______.

___Does the writer give background information about this hero? If not, note on his/her draft.

___The first quotation has quotation marks. If not, note on his/her draft.

___The quotation is cited appropriately. (SpringBoard page#).

___The writer made a detailed connection from this quote to topic sentence.

Circle one.YESOR NO

___Hero # 3 is ______. His/her heroic trait is ______.

___Does the writer give background information about this hero? If not, note on his/her draft.

___The first quotation has quotation marks. If not, note on his/her draft.

___The quotation is cited appropriately. (SpringBoard page#).

___The writer made a detailed connection from this quote to topic sentence.

Circle one.YESOR NO

___Underline the concluding sentence.

___Do all sentences align with topic sentence? Draw a line through anything that doesn’t go with the topic sentence.

Body Paragraph 3: Negation

___Underline the topic sentence.

___Topic sentence introduces “textual/movie” heroes by name and trait. (2 text + 1 movie 0r 3 text)

___Hero # 1 is ______. His/her non-heroic trait is ______.

___Does the writer give background information about this hero? If not, note on his/her draft.

___The first quotation has quotation marks. If not, note on his/her draft.

___The quotation is cited appropriately. (SpringBoard page#).

___If a movie scene, does the writer paraphrase the events of the scene clearly?

___The writer made a detailed connection from this example to topic sentence.

Circle one.YESOR NO

___Hero # 2 is ______. His/her non-heroic trait is ______.

___Does the writer give background information about this hero? If not, note on his/her draft.

___The first quotation has quotation marks. If not, note on his/her draft.

___The quotation is cited appropriately. (SpringBoard page#).

___If a movie scene, does the writer paraphrase the events of the scene clearly?

___The writer made a detailed connection from this example to topic sentence.

Circle one.YESOR NO

___Hero # 3 is ______. His/her non-heroic trait is ______.

___Does the writer give background information about this hero? If not, note on his/her draft.

___The first quotation has quotation marks. If not, note on his/her draft.

___The quotation is cited appropriately. (SpringBoard page#).

___If a movie scene, does the writer paraphrase the events of the scene clearly?

___The writer made a detailed connection from this example to topic sentence.

Circle one.YESOR NO

___Underline the concluding sentence.

___Do all sentences align with topic sentence? Draw a line through anything that doesn’t go with the topic sentence.

Conclusion paragraph

___Thesis is restated in first sentence including function, example, andnegation.

___Thesis is written in different words than in intro paragraph.

___Reflection on heroes is a minimum of 4 sentences.

___Suggestions for writer

______

Conventions

___ Circle any word that looks FUNKY!

___ Place a dot in front of the line that may have a punctuation error (one dot/error)

Transition words

___Circleeach transition word or phrase

Appropriate use of transition words/phrases at the beginning of each paragraph AND ALSO at the beginning of at least THREE sentences. (Please list in provided space)

  • Body paragraph #1______
  • Within text #1______
  • Body paragraph #2______
  • Within text #2______
  • Body paragraph #3______
  • Within text #3______
  • Conclusion paragraph______