Kellie Fischer (Instructor Name)

Student Name

English 101

5 January 2006

Secret Sanctuary (outline)

Hook:Locked away in the beauty of Glacier National Park is a secret sanctuary that cannot be reached by car.

Introduction ideas:Mystery? Wonder? How can it be reached? Is there a best time?

What will we see there?

Travel brochure approach, make it an invitation.

Thesis:Come with me to discover a pristine world where wildlife are comfortable with

themselves, their habitat, and the humans who make the trek to see the picturesque mystery of well-hidden Avalanche Lake.

Thesis question:In what ways are thee animals are comfortable with themselves, their habitat, and the people who hike to Avalanche Lake? How do we get to this hidden place? Why/how is it hidden?

Transition and topic sentence for first body paragraph:

As we begin the easy walk along a well-traveled path, you may be thinking that this is too effortless because the trail is so flat; further, you may be wondering why it would be so hiddenon such an effortless walk.

Topic sentence question: If the path is well-worn, doesn't that suggest that it is not, in fact, hidden? If it is effortless, why wouldn't more people go there?

Support details:Cedars stand like ancient guards to the real path

Bridge leads to the path—moss, wet, slippery

Stream with spray, smooth rocks

Tie back sentence:It's gorgeous, but it's still not hidden.

Transition and topic sentence for second body paragraph:

Finally stepping off of the bridge, we notice a small sign, so small, that had we not looked in that direction, we would never have seen its small lettering pointing us up the long trail to Avalanche Lake. (transition) Excitedly, we leave the flat, wide floor of the Nature Trail and begin our climb. (topic sentence)

Topic sentence question:

Where will our climb led us? What will we see along the way?

Support details:Creek goes with us

Ancient tree roots

Bits of bark, pebbles, rocks

Deer dung

Tie back sentence:need one

Transition and topic sentence for second body paragraph:

Unlike the busy Nature Loop, the travelers here are few and tend to be quieter, more intent on communing with nature and making it up the next rocky, dusty hill.

Topic sentence question:

How are the hikers who choose this path different than those who stick to the well-worn, flat trail? What is the atmosphere here like?

Support details:Birds singing & rustling

Pinecones falling

Own heart pounding

Tie back sentence:Breathing deeply to remain oxygenated, we smell the strong scent of cedar and pine washed clean by the spray from the sassy creek.

Transition and topic sentence for second body paragraph:

Among the aged trees, where the sun reaches through, under, and between their long thick branches, the younger undergrowth becomes thicker.

Topic sentence question:In what ways does the undergrowth become thicker? How does that affect our hike?

Support details:Trees try to maintain shade cover

Sun fights to get through

Bushes have variegated greens