Describing how poor Mr Woolliscroft is… Why is Mr Kelly tall?

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EXPLANATIONS

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Mr Woolliscroft, the factory manager, is poor. / Rich Poor
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/ 1 / Mr Kelly is tall because he was born in a greenhouse. / Feature linked Feature
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Different Types

Mr Woolliscroft is poor. He only earns £200 a day. / £200
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JW / 2 / Mr Kelly is tall because he was born in a greenhouse. A greenhouse is good for growing things. / Feature linked Feature linked Feature
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Comparisons

Mr Woolliscroft is poor. He only earns £200 a day. Whereas Mrs Rae, the Managing Director, is a lot richer earning £5000 a day. / £5,000 £200
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Mrs Rae JW / 3 / Mr Kelly is tall because he was born in a greenhouse. A greenhouse is good for growing things because it traps the heat from the sun’s radiation. / Feature linked Feature linked Feature
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Ratio and Patterns

Mr Woolliscroft is poor. He only earns £200 a day. Whereas, Mrs Rae is a lot richer earning £5000 a day. Mrs Rae earns 25 times as much as Mr Woolliscroft, but then Mrs Rae is the Managing Director. Mr Woolliscroft, however, is richer than Mr Bull, the engineer, who only earns £100 a day, half as much as Mr Woolliscroft. /
£5,000 £200 £100
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Mrs Rae JW Mr Bull / 4 / Mr Kelly is tall because he was born in a greenhouse. A greenhouse is good for growing things because it traps the heat from the sun’s radiation. Secondly, Mr Kelly has a tall father and has inherited his father’s genes. / Feature linked Feature linked Feature
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