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Scoring Guide Beowulf Compare and Contrast Essay
Advanced / Proficient / Progressing / Beginningq Meets all of the “Proficient” criteria plus:
q Zero errors in grammar and mechanics
q Includes additional information from class discussions and lectures pertaining to Anglo-Saxons or archetypes that adds deeper analysis and understanding of the Hero’s Journey.
q More than 3 quotes used to support thesis
q More than 9 vocabulary words and transition words are used effectively and correctly
q Comprehensive understanding of Archetypes and Hero’s External AND Internal/Spiritual Journey is evident in the analysis and evaluation of the essay / q Essay uses the Archetypes, Hero’s External Journey, and specific facts /details/ events from the epic poem to compare and contrast Beowulf the Epic Poem with Beowulf the 2007 Film by integrating three quotes (cited correctly) to analyze Beowulf. You MUST use at least one quote from the textbook for each Body Paragraph (P#2, P#3 and P#4).
q P#1: Intro with Thesis explaining three things: (1) the general information including the title and author (or director) or the two works; (2) the purpose of the Hero’s External Journey; and (3) the purpose of the essay.
q P#2: Compare the Similarities of and Contrast the Differences between the SEPARATION Stages of the Hero’s External Journey in Beowulf the Epic Poem and Beowulf the 2007 Film. (8-11 sentences long)
q P#3: Compare the Similarities of and Contrast the Differences between the INITIATION Stages of the Hero’s External Journey in Beowulf the Epic Poem and Beowulf the 2007 Film. (8-11 sentences long)
q P#4: Compare the Similarities of and Contrast the Differences between the RETURN Stages of the Hero’s External Journey in Beowulf the Epic Poem and Beowulf the 2007 Film. (8-11 sentences long)
q P#5: Conclusion explains two things: (1) restate the purpose of the Hero’s Journey; and (2) evaluate which of the two versions of the story best fulfills the criteria of the Hero’s External Journey and a brief explanation of why one is better than the other.
q Written in the present tense.
q Written in the third person point of view. ( He, his, him, her, hers, they, their, them)
q Capitalize names of Stages and put in BOLD.
q Contains a total of nine vocabulary words (three in P#2, three in P#3, and three in P#4) and vocabulary word is highlighted or in bold.
q Use a total of nine transition words: three in P#2, three in P#3, and three in P#4 and transition words are numbered 1-9 above the transition.
q Has few, if any, grammar or mechanical errors, which include: spelling, capitalization, subject/verb agreement, punctuation, pronoun/antecedent agreement, syntax Any errors here do not prevent reader from understanding the content.
q Uses the following format: 3 typed pages minimum, doubled spaced, MLA format, 12 font size, Time New Roman font, 8-11 sentence paragraphs / q Meets fewer than 4 of the “Proficient” criteria
Beowulf Essay Scoring Rubric
Language. 6· Capitalization
· Punctuation
· Spelling / Grammar
· 9 Vocabulary List 1 words used 20 pts
Writing. 2 Informative/Explanatory Text
· MLA Formatting
· Clear Thesis
· Organization
· 3 Pages Long with 8-11 sentence paragraphs
· 9 Transition Words/ Phrases used
· Verb Tense
· Point of View
· Correct Use of Citations 40 pts
Reading for Literature.1 & 5
· Archetypes and Hero’s Journey used to analyze and evaluate the Epic Poem
and the 2007 Film
· Quotes and textual evidence support analysis of Archetypes and Hero’s Journey in the Epic Poem and the 2007 Film 40 pts
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TOTAL 100 pts
/ A = 90—100
B = 80—89
C = 70—79
D = 60—69
F = 0—59
BEOWULF ESSAY DUE DATES
a. Monday, Sept. 11→ Introduction & THESIS Paragraph #1 *This paragraph does not need to be 8-11 sentences. (5 pts)
b. Wednesday, Sept. 13→ Paragraph #2 about SEPARATION Stages of Hero’s External Journey. Include Archetypes AND at least one quote from Beowulf the Epic Poem to support thesis. (You MUST have page numbers). (5 pts)
c. Monday, Sept. 18→ Paragraph #3 about INITIATION Stages of Hero’s External Journey. Include Archetypes AND at least one quote from Beowulf the Epic Poem to support thesis. (You MUST have page numbers). (5 pts)
d. Tuesday, Sept. 19→ Paragraph #4 about RETURN Stages of Hero’s External Journey. Include Archetypes AND at least one quote from Beowulf the Epic Poem to support thesis. (You MUST have page numbers). (5 pts)
e. Wednesday, Sept. 20→Paragraph #5 Conclusion. *This paragraph does not need to be 8-11 sentences. (5 pts)
FRIDAY, September 22, 2016→ FINAL TYPED PAPER DUE This will not be accepted late. (100 pts)
Beowulf Compare/Contrast Essay Formula
PROMPT: Compare and Contrast the similarities and the differences in the ways in which the character Beowulf goes through the stages of the Hero’s External Journey in Beowulf the Epic Poem and Beowulf the 2007 Film, and explain which version best meets the criteria established by the Hero’s External Journey.
POINT by POINT
o P#1: Intro with Thesis explaining three things: (1) general information including the title and author (or director) or the two works; (2) the purpose of the Hero’s External Journey; and (3) the purpose of the essay
o P#2: Compare the Similarities of and Contrast the Differences between the SEPARATION Stages of the Hero’s External Journey in Beowulf the Epic Poem and Beowulf the 2007 Film.
o P#3: Compare the Similarities of and Contrast the Differences between the INITIATION Stages of the Hero’s External Journey in Beowulf the Epic Poem and Beowulf the 2007 Film.
o P#4: Compare the Similarities of and Contrast the Differences between the RETURN Stages of the Hero’s External Journey in Beowulf the Epic Poem and Beowulf the 2007 Film.
o P#5: Conclusion explaining two things: (1) restate the purpose of the Hero’s Journey; and (2) evaluate which of the two versions of the story best fulfills the criteria of the Hero’s External Journey and a brief explanation of why one is better than the other.
REMINDERS:
1. Identify each stage of the Hero’s Journey in your essay (capitalize it, because it is a proper noun). Without doing this, it will just sound like a summary of the Beowulf the Epic Poem and the Beowulf the 2007 Film.
2. Don’t forget to analyze how the External Journey is symbolic of the Internal/Spiritual Journey that Beowulf is experiencing. This will make your essay more complex.
3. Don’t forget to mention in your analysis of the Hero’s External Journey how the archetypes (objects, places, people) from the Archetypes PowerPoint play a role in both versions of Beowulf.
Compare / ContrastIn the same way
Likewise
Similarly
Common
Share
Equally
Parallel
Both
Similar
Also / While
But
Whereas
Different
Dissimilar
In Contrast
Although
Except
Otherwise
However
Yet / Even though
On the Contrary
Despite that
At the same time
On the other hand
Regardless
Nevertheless
Notwithstanding
In spite of
Instead
Words or phrases you MUST use in an essay that compares and contrasts works of literature:
Writing your Thesis Statement:
Your thesis statement will be the one sentence that tells your readers how the subjects are similar or different and why this is an important comparison to make. Ideally, your thesis should focus on three points of comparison, so that you have three distinct differences or similarities to discuss. Here are some examples of strong thesis statements and strategies for the comparison and contrast essay:
· Show readers why one subject is more desirable than the other. Example: "Cats are better pets than dogs because they require less maintenance, are more independent, and are more adaptable."
· Help readers make a meaningful comparison between two subjects. Example: "New York City and San Francisco are both great cities for young professionals but they differ in terms of their job opportunities, social environment, and living conditions."
· Show readers how two subjects are similar and different. Example: "While both The Catcher in the Rye and To Kill a Mockingbird explore the themes of loss of innocence and the deep bond between siblings, To Kill a Mockingbird is more concerned with racism while The Catcher in the Rye focuses on the prejudices of class."
Body P#2 Hunger Games SAMPLE
In the Separation, Katniss Everdeen from the novel and the film both have a Mysterious Birth because they are born in the extreme poverty of District 12, as noted by the quote from the novel: “Fine bread like this is for special occasions “(Collins 25). Bread, a commodity, people today take for granted, is a rare treat for the impoverished people of the Capitol’s struggling District 12. 1Similarly, both the novel and film character are aware of and are raised by her parents until her father dies in a mine explosion, which causes the hero to experience the Orphaned Stage because Katniss’ mother becomes negligent in raising her children, so Katniss takes on the role of provider and nurturer for her mother and little sister, Prim. 2Furthermore, both warriors receive the benefits of the Secluded Education Stage in that they are both struggling to survive by hunting illegally beyond the electrified fence in the woods. The woods is considered an archetype of forbidden evil and chaos, which is ironically the place where Katniss feels free and learns to hone her skill using her bow to kill animals, which she then trades at the Hob, an illegal black market, to feed her starving family. This ability will aid her later on her journey, which is appropriate since it is the indifferent attitude of the Capitol that drives her into the forbidden forest to experience the unknown, ultimately making her a mentally and physically stronger tribute in the Hunger Games. DO NOT WRITE ABOUT THESE 3 STAGES!
Citing and Integrating Quotes in the Body Paragraphs #2, 3, 4:
Remember these three things when using quotes from Beowulf the Epic Poem in your essay:
1. Integrate quotes with your own words and analysis
2. Do not use quotes longer than 3 lines.
3. Use slashes (/) to indicate line breaks within the poem and keep all punctuation intact as it appears in the poem
Short Quotations
When a source has no known author, use a shortened title of the work instead of an author name. Place the title in quotation marks if it's a short work (such as an article) or italicize or underline it if it's a longer work (e.g. plays, books, television shows, entire Web sites) and provide a page number.
· When boasting about his victory in the sea battle, Beowulf says, "Monsters of the deep were roused to rage . . . / Yet I struck the sea-monster with the point of my sword” (Beowulf 20-21).
For example, when quoting short passages of prose or poetry, use the following examples:
· According to some, dreams express "profound aspects of personality" (Foulkes 184), though others disagree.
· According to Foulkes's study, dreams may express "profound aspects of personality" (184).
Punctuation marks such as periods, commas, and semicolons should appear after the parenthetical citation. Question marks and exclamation points should appear within the quotation marks if they are a part of the quoted passage but after the parenthetical citation if they are a part of your text.
· Is it possible that dreams may express "profound aspects of personality" (Foulkes 184)?
VS
· “Is it possible that dreams may express profound aspects of personality?" (Foulkes 184).
Adding or Omitting Words in Quotations
If you add a word or words in a quotation, you should put brackets around the words to indicate that they are not part of the original text.
· Jan Harold Brunvand, in an essay on urban legends, states, "Some individuals [who retell urban legends] make a point of learning every rumor or tale" (78).
If you omit a word or words from a quotation, you should indicate the deleted word or words by using ellipsis marks, which are three periods ( . . . ) preceded and followed by a space. For example:
· In an essay on urban legends, Jan Harold Brunvand notes that "some individuals make a point of learning every recent rumor or tale . . . and in a short time a lively exchange of details occurs" (78).
Integrating Quotes Correctly =
Blending quotes from the book with your own words correctly.
WRONG:
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There are many repetitive parts in the book, which make it boring. For example, “Someone’s killed her! She’s dead in the basement! She’s been murdered” (James 18).
WRONG:
↓ run-on
There are many repetitive parts in the book, which make it boring, “Someone’s killed her! She’s dead in the basement! She’s been murdered” (James 18).
WRONG:
↓ run-on
There are many repetitive parts in the book, which make it boring, “Someone’s killed her! She’s dead in the basement! She’s been murdered,” meaning everything is totally predictable (James 18).
RIGHT:
Repetitive parts in the book, such as Jessica shouting, “Someone’s killed her! She’s dead in the basement! She’s been murdered,” make the characters sound foolish and create a melodramatic mood in the unrealistic story (James 18).
RIGHT:
Many repetitive instances in the book make the characters sound foolish and create an unrealistic and melodramatic mood, such as when Jessica shouts, “Someone’s killed her! She’s dead in the basement! She’s been murdered!” (James 18).