Sentence Structure Activity
For each sentence, decide if there is a comma splice, run-on, fragment, or no error. (There may be more than one error per sentence.) Then correct any of those errors in the sentence. ]
1. I twist the brass doorknob to my four bedroom house, a cool chill rain up my spine.
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2. I said to myself I must have forgotten to close the backdoor it’s really cold.
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3. I hope Hinata didn’t get outside!
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4. I immediately walked to my thermostat to check the temperature of the house it was 58 degrees, so I turned on the heater to 70.
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5. Walked to the backdoor and sure enough it was open so I closed it and I began to walk down my hallway it was pitch black but I knew my way around the house, a creaking sound echoing in the unpopulated house from each step I took on my tile floor.
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6. I kicked my shoes off in the bedroom to the right of the hallway and I walked to the bathroom to brush my teeth my pupils dilated from the flash of the light being turned on.
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7. I went to my beloved Hinata’s room I grabbed her cat food and put it in her semi empty bowl, I shook her bowl so she would hear her food rattle and called for her name but I all I got in response was a silent reply.
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8. I thought to myself that is odd she always replies back to me when I call for her she must be asleep in one of the rooms.
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9. I checked my room, then the guest bed room, I felt something was off so my heart beat quickened I checked my computer room still no sign of my bundle of joy.
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10. Finally I got to the living room and noticed that she was taking her nap under the reclining chair. I was relieved at first, but I called her and was walking to her there was no response, I got closer and called her name, there was no raising her head to my beckoning.
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11. My eyes begin to well up as I call for her one last time with my cracking voice reaching my hand out a few inches from her body my hand quivering ever so quickly.
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12. I placed my hand on her body it wasn’t my vibrant Hinata that would welcome me every day when I came home or bug me when im trying to play my video games, her body was stiffened and it felt like a soulless doll.
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13. Flashbacks ran through my head she was no longer bringing me her contribute of food by killing the birds/ lizards in the backyard or protecting me from moths and spiders.
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14. It was a shell of what she used to be, all my happiness had been siphoned from me, I had no one left to rely on me no one who needed me I was unnecessary, my father and mothers had new lives without me and both my cats died.
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15. I screamed in agony after I collected all my thoughts in reality she was gone I swore to myself I would become necessary again I had to rely on myself and grow up.
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