UNIT #17B
FAULTY THESIS STATEMENTS
1. TOPIC: Entrepreneurship and Human Relations
REFINEMENT OF TOPIC: ______
THESIS: Marketing a non-traditional product requires a person skilled in
multiple disciplines to be able to deal with all the interests involved.
REVISED: A multidisciplinary approach combined with a human relations
background should be utilized when marketing a non-traditional product
FURTHER REVISED: ______
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2. TOPIC: Internet/Network privacy of public and non-public information as it
pertains to individuals.
REFINEMENT OF TOPIC: Internet/Network privacy of public and non-public
information
THESIS: In this information age the government does not do enough to protect
individual’s privacy while using computers or on the internet. Individuals should
be more aware of what data is publicly available on them, and how to keep what
they do private.
REVISED: In this information age the government should enact more stringent
legislation to protect individual’s privacy while using electronic medium.
FURTHER REVISION: ______
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3. TOPIC: Teaching special needs children
REFINEMENT OF TOPIC: Government aid to special needs children.
THESIS: Is the government doing all they can to help these kids become more
independent and improve their lives?
REVISED: Unless the government allocates more resources to helping special
needs children, they will not be able to lead independent and improved lives.
4. TOPIC: Lack of minorities or (Black Americans) in construction.
REFINEMENT OF TOPIC: ______
THESIS: The small number of minorities (or Black Americans) in construction
management isn’t just directly caused by a lack of interest, but rather growing up
in self-destructive environments were education comes last and survival comes
first.
REVISED: ______
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5. TOPIC: The modernization of the survey industry.
THESIS: This surveyor of the 21stcentury needs to utilize the technology
available to optimize the business aspects of his practice.
REVISED: The surveying industry of the 21st century should use modern
technology to optimize the business aspects of this industry.
FURTHER REVISION: ______
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6. TOPIC: All mathematical models build on each other, so when students don’t
fully comprehend basic building blocks they can not comprehend higher level
skills.
REFINEMENT OF TOPIC: ______
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THESIS: Students in primary schooling should be able to write at their own pace
in mathematics to ensure a comprehensive understanding of basic building
blocks of mathematics needed for the following high order mathematical skills.
REVISED: Students should be allowed to learn at their own pace in mathematics
to enable a comprehensive understanding of basic building blocks needed for
advanced mathematical models.
FURTHER REVISED: ______
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7. TOPIC: The unsettling number of websites with unclear or complex navigation.
THESIS: Prolific web designers should create user friendly websites by
displaying clear and effective paths of navigation throughout.
REVISED: The government should regulate information sharing on the internet
and provide steep penalties to offenders.
FURTHER REVISED: ______
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