Level 1 WRITTEN and VISUAL TEXT Essay Feedback Name:
Mark the effort you put into this essay: 10% 50% 100%
Student – tick in pencil on the criteria where you think you are. My essay…
Achievement
/Achievement with Merit
/Achievement with Excellence
Show understanding… using supporting evidence. / Show convincing understanding… using supporting evidence. / Show perceptive understanding… using supporting evidence.· Addresses the text / · Addresses the text and makes connections between the points in the essay (similarities and differences) / · Addresses the text and makes connections between the points in the essay (similarities and differences)
· Answers BOTH parts of the selected topic (“Describe” AND “Explain”) / · Answers BOTH parts of the selected topic equally (“Describe” AND “Explain”) / · Answers BOTH parts of the selected topic equally (“Describe” AND “Explain”)
· Is a reasonable length (at least 300 words) / · Is a reasonable length (at least 300 words) / · Is a reasonable length (at least 300 words)
· uses the key words from the question (or synonyms) / · uses the key words from the question (or synonyms) / · uses the key words from the question (or synonyms)
PARAGRAPHS
· uses paragraphs (one point per paragraph)
· Most points relate to:
o Idea
o Writers purpose
o Audience
· Uses specific and relevant examples to support answer (at least one quote per paragraph)
· Identifies techniques / PARAGRAPHS
· uses paragraphs (one point per paragraph)
· Each point relates to:
o Idea
o Writers purpose
o Audience
· Uses specific and relevant examples to support points (at least one quote per paragraph)
o Quotes are integrated
· Identifies several techniques / PARAGRAPHS
· uses paragraphs (one point per paragraph)
· Each point relates to:
o Idea
o Writers purpose
o Audience
· Uses specific and relevant examples to support answer (at least one quote per paragraph)
o Quotes are woven effectively
· Identifies several techniques
· Shows the writers purpose (messages/themes/ideas) / · Shows the writers purpose (messages/themes/ideas) / · Uses a wider vocabulary to show understanding of the writers purpose (messages/themes/ ideas)
· Contains a personal response
o effect on the reader / · Contains a personal response
o effect on the reader
o the relevance to you (your personal understanding) / · Contains a personal response
o effect on the reader
o the relevance to you (your personal understanding)
o the relevance to the world beyond the text
· Your writing is planned and organised / · Your writing is planned, fluent (makes sense) and controlled / · Your writing is planned, fluent (makes sense), controlled and
TEACHER’S COMMENT:
STUDENT REFLECTION:
In the back of your English book write a reflection: What is the teacher saying in the feedback? How do I feel about my mark? What are my NEXT STEPS?
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