Language Lesson- “Most Dangerous Game”
Read this paragraph, some of the words from the original text have been replaced with words that are less effective, more bland, overused, or boring. For each underlined word or phrase, come up with two possible replacements – choose words or phrases that are more expressive and paint a more vivid picture in the reader’s mind.
“It’s ratherunknown—“
“What island is it?” Rainsford asked.
“The old charts call it ‘Ship-TrapIsland,’” Whitney replied. “Adescriptivename, isn’t it? Sailors have astrange fearof the place. I don’t know why. Some superstition—“
“Can’t see it,” remarked Rainsford, trying tolookthrough the dank tropical nightyou could almost touchas it pressed its thick warm blackness in upon the yacht.
Read out paragraph several times with different suggestions inserted. Discuss virtues of various options and the way an author can use language to make the readers see, feel, touch, taste, understand, etc., and how word choice is essential for creating the mood the author wants.
Replacements:
1)Unknown:
2)Descriptive:
3)Strange Fear:
4)You could almost touch:
Language Lesson- “Most Dangerous Game”
Read this paragraph, some of the words from the original text have been replaced with words that are less effective, more bland, overused, or boring. For each underlined word or phrase, come up with two possible replacements – choose words or phrases that are more expressive and paint a more vivid picture in the reader’s mind.
“It’s ratherunknown—“
“What island is it?” Rainsford asked.
“The old charts call it ‘Ship-TrapIsland,’” Whitney replied. “Adescriptivename, isn’t it? Sailors have astrange fearof the place. I don’t know why. Some superstition—“
“Can’t see it,” remarked Rainsford, trying tolookthrough the dank tropical nightyou could almost touchas it pressed its thick warm blackness in upon the yacht.
Read out paragraph several times with different suggestions inserted. Discuss virtues of various options and the way an author can use language to make the readers see, feel, touch, taste, understand, etc., and how word choice is essential for creating the mood the author wants.
Replacements:
1)Unknown:
2)Descriptive:
3)Strange Fear:
4)You could almost touch: