FR. LEO J. AUSTIN C.S.S.

CANADIAN AND WORLD STUDIES DEPARTMENT

2016-2017

Dear Parent/Guardian:

The Independent Study Essay component in HSP 3U1 is very important to your child's success. It accounts for 15% of the final grade. Due to the nature of the assignment it is mandatory that all of its parts be completed on time. The following dates will be adhered to without exception:

Initial Research Proposal Due Date: Fri.March 31

(Min.1 page of notes from 10 sources,(at least 10 pages) and works cited page)

Research Organizer Due Date:Thurs. April 27

Argument Development Due Date:Fri. May 12

Rough Copy/Peer Evaluation Due Date: Fri.May 26

Final Copy Due Date:Fri. June 2 (turnitin.com)

Presentation Due Date:Mon. June 5

Due to the nature of this assignment, all components, including the final copy, must be submitted on time. Late admissions will not be accepted. If the student is absent it is expected that the essay will be delivered to the subject at the beginning of the school day.

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Mrs. C. Simon Student Signature Parent Signature

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Student name (please print)

HSP 3U1 INDEPENDENT STUDY UNIT

ESSAY COMPONENT TIMELINE NAME:______

A. INDEPENDENT STUDY ASSIGNED:______

B. INITIAL RESEARCH PROPOSAL______(35 - F)

(Min.1 page of notes from 10 sources, (at least 10 pages) and works cited page)

C. RESEARCH ORGANIZER: ______(30 - F )

D. ARGUMENT DEVELOPMENT:______(40 -F)

E. ROUGH COPY:______(10-F)

PEER EVALUATION:______(5-F)

G. GOOD COPY:______(100-S)

H. PRESENTATION:______(70-S)

HSP 3U1 ISU REPORT COMPONENT REQUIREMENTS:

-include a title page

-typed or neatly printed, every other line, one side of the page

-correct MLA style

-encyclopaedia and text are not permitted as cited sources

-topic must be approved by teacher

-1500 - 2000 words, double-spaced – 6-8 TYPED PAGES

- 7-10 minute presentation to the class

-all rough work must be included in a folder for evaluation

-the use of another student’s work, in whole or in part, is plagiarism, and will earn a grade of zero. Both parties will be penalized

-any use of an author’s words, ideas or statistics, without citation, will earn a grade of zero

-all isu work must be original – no student may present work for more than one assignment, or one course. This will earn a grade of zero.

INITIAL RESEARCH PROPOSAL DATE______

TOPIC______

TENTATIVE THESIS:

1ST DRAFT. ______

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COMMENTS FROM TEACHER: ______

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2ND DRAFT. ______

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COMMENTS FROM TEACHER: ______

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3RD DRAFT. ______

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COMMENTS:______

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*THE THESIS MUST BE APPROVED BY THE DEADLINE FOR MARKS TO BE AWARDED*

APPROVAL:______MARK: ______

HSP 3U1 ISU THESIS STATEMENT SHEET

NAME:______

DATE:______TOPIC:______

THESIS:______

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MAIN POINTS TO SUPPORT THESIS:

1.______

CA/REB______

2.______

CA/REB______

3.______

CA/REB______

4.______

CA/REB______

HSP 3U1 ISU EVALUATION OF THESIS PRESENTATION

NAME______

TOPIC______

THESIS / Thesis is clear, specific and the product of conferencing / Thesis requires research and/or revision / Thesis has not been approved
Thesis is not present
ARGUMENTS
Main Point
#1 / argument is unified and cohesive. It is clear, assertive, expands and supports thesis / Topic sentence argues a specific point. Points must be refined to support and expand topic sentence. / Topic sentence does not argue a point.
Little or no evidence of points to support a cohesive argument
Main Point
#2 / argument is unified and cohesive. It is clear, assertive, expands and supports thesis. / Topic sentence argues a specific point. Points must be refined to support and expand topic sentence. / Topic sentence does not argue a point.
Little or no evidence of points to support a cohesive argument
Main Point
#3 / argument is unified and cohesive. It is clear, assertive, expands and supports thesis / Topic sentence argues a specific point. Points must be refined to support and expand topic sentence. / Topic sentence does not argue a point.
Little or no evidence of points to support a cohesive argument
COUNTER-ARGUMENTS / counter-arguments identified, addressed and thoroughly rebutted / Some evidence of counter-arguments. Some evidence of rebuttal. / Counter-argument and rebuttal either not present or are inconsistent/incomplete
RESEARCH / Topic sentences demonstrate excellent breadth of knowledge of main authorities on subject / Topic sentences show some research but need more statistics/evidence to support points / Topic sentences demonstrate insufficient research

HSP 3U1 ISU ARGUMENT DEVELOPMENT WORKSHEET

DUE DATE:______

THESIS:______

FIRST TOPIC SENTENCE: ______

Illustrating Sentences, Evidence, Connection to Thesis, Counter Argument, Rebuttal

1.______

2.______

3.______4.______

5.______

SECOND TOPIC SENTENCE:

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Illustrating Sentences, Evidence, Connection to Thesis, Counter Argument, Rebuttal

1.______

2.______

3.______

4.______

5.______

THIRD TOPIC SENTENCE:

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Illustrating Sentences, Evidence, Connection to Thesis, Counter Argument, Rebuttal

1.______

2.______

3.______

4.______

5.______

HSP 3U1 EVALUATION OF ARGUMENT DEVELOPMENT PRESENTATION

NAME______DATE______

THESIS

Thesis is unified, specific and shows signs of development……………….3

ARGUMENTS

Main Point #1

-topic sentence is clear, argumentative, supports thesis…………………….1

-illustrating sentences expand upon topic sentence

-evidence from scholarly source supports topic sentence

-elements form a cohesive and complete argument………………………...3

-counter argument is addressed and rebutted

using evidence and compelling argument

Main Point #2

-topic sentence is clear, argumentative, supports thesis……………………1

-illustrating sentences expand upon topic sentence

-evidence from scholarly source supports topic sentence

-elements form a cohesive and complete argument………………………..3

-counter argument is addressed and rebutted

using evidence and compelling argument

Main Point #3

-topic sentence is clear, argumentative, supports thesis……….………… ..1

-illustrating sentences expand upon topic sentence

-evidence from scholarly source supports topic sentence

-elements form a cohesive and complete argument……………….……….3

-counter argument is addressed and rebutted

-using evidence and compelling argument

RESEARCH

-evidence of additional research……………………………….…………..5

HSP 3U1 ISU ESSAY PLANNER (FIRST ROUGH DRAFT)

BODY PARAGRAPH #1

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ANALYSIS OF PARAGRAPH

-topic sentence reflects the topic of the paragraph?

-all necessary elements of paragraph are present?

-any possible counter arguments are mentioned and dealt with in rebuttal?

-paragraph flows with paragraph above and below?

COMPLETE THIS ANALYSIS FOR ALL BODY PARAGRAPHS

BODY PARAGRAPH #2

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BODY PARAGRAPH #3

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BODY PARAGRAPH #4(if necessary)

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INTRODUCTION

Now that your main points are defended, you are ready to create the introduction.

THE INTRODUCTION IS TO HAVE THE FOLLOWING:

A. sentences to capture reader's attention and introduce topic?

B. major points of essay, ONE SENTENCE EACH, in the order in which they appear in the essay.

C. Thesis is the last sentence of the introduction.

FINALLY: Is the introduction interesting? Is it of sufficient length? This is the first impression of your essay that the reader will have.

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CONCLUSION

FOLLOW THE SAME BASIC FORMAT FOR THE CONCLUSION AND THE INTRODUCTION (BE CREATIVE WITH THE WORDING)

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ANALYSIS OF CONCLUSION

-major points of essay united in conclusion?

-thesis reworked into an interesting final statement?

-no new information

*It is appropriate to use a quote in either the introduction or conclusion, but not both.*

*organize your body paragraphs so that the strongest ones are first and last.*

HSP 3U1 ISU SELF-ASSESSMENT OF ESSAY PLANNER

NAME:______DATE:______

INTRODUCTION

-sentences to capture reader's attention and introduce topic?-major points of essay, ONE SENTENCE EACH, are in the order in which they appear in the essay.thesis is the last sentence of the introduction.-introduction is interesting? of sufficient length?.1……….5

BODY PARAGRAPH 1

-topic sentence reflects the topic of the paragraph?-all necessary elements of paragraph are present?-any possible counter arguments are mentioned and dealt with in rebuttal?

-paragraph flows with paragraph above and below?...... 1…………..5

BODY PARAGRAPH 2

-topic sentence reflects the topic of the paragraph?-all necessary elements of paragraph are present?-any possible counter arguments are mentioned and dealt with in rebuttal?

-paragraph flows with paragraph above and below?...... 1…………..5

BODY PARAGRAPH 3

-topic sentence reflects the topic of the paragraph?-all necessary elements of paragraph are present?-any possible counter arguments are mentioned and dealt with in rebuttal?

-paragraph flows with paragraph above and below?...... 1…………..5

BODY PARAGRAPH 4

-topic sentence reflects the topic of the paragraph?-all necessary elements of paragraph are present?-any possible counter arguments are mentioned and dealt with in rebuttal?

-paragraph flows with paragraph above and below?...... 1…………..5

CONCLUSION

-major points of essay united in conclusion?

-thesis reworked into an interesting final statement?

-no new information……………………………………………………….1……………5

THE NEXT STEP IS YOUR FINAL DRAFT. IT SHOULD BE TYPED, DOUBLE-SPACED, AND OF SUFFICIENT LENGTH. DO NOT USE THE COMPUTER WORD COUNT. THE FINAL DRAFT SHOULD INCLUDE CITATIONS AND A PROPERLY FORMATTED WORKS CITED PAGE. IT SHOULD BE EDITED BY A PARENT, PEER, TEACHER etc. AND THEN REVISED TO CREATE THE GOOD COPY.

SOME COMMON ERRORS MADE IN ESSAYS

*do not refer to the essay: “This essay will prove…The purpose of this essay is to…As will be shown in the course of this essay…”* “In conclusion…”

1. “impact”: this is a noun, not a verb.

2. number/amount: Incorrect:As the amount of elderly people increases, so, too, will the need for social services.

A great amount of ships

Correct:

3. less/fewer: Incorrect: less people would have been killed or injured

4. their/there

5. its it’s: contractions do not belong in formal writing.

6. then/than: than is a comparative:

then indicates time:

7. comma abuse: The Egyptians were polytheistic, they had many gods.

8. to/too/ two: Incorrect: “Stereotyping has gone to far and needs to come to a halt”

9. “you”: this is to be used in spoken English only.

10. “a lot”: this as well.

11. Don’t end a sentence with a preposition :It is important to decide who you agree with

12. use of slang or informal language in a formal paper: “step up to the plate” “swindled” “need to” things women did to help out in the war “came into play”

13. disrespect: noun, not verb. “disrespected” is not formal English

14. noun/pronoun agreement:

Correct: A child has the right to parents who will love him.

Other Options:

Incorrect: A child has the right to parents who will love them.

The religion of a society reveals much about their culture.

15. Sentence fragments: Look for a subject and a predicate. READ IT ALOUD: ERRORS ARE EASIER TO DETECT.

Rome was a great Empire. A strong sense of pride in the Roman people, who were lead by a strong government. Also a powerful army, led by a smart man.

16. Run-on sentences.

Mesopotamia which possessed the only form of writing, with the exception of the Egyptians, known as cuneiform, as well as being credited with the invention of the wheel and the idea of written law code was not destined to reach the greatest heights of the ancient world because of geographic determinism.

GUIDELINES FOR FORMAL PAPERS:

  1. Use of numbers:
  1. Use of abbreviations: etc,
  1. Use of symbols: %, $, &
  1. Subtitles:
  1. Tense: past tense is most appropriate for Social Science papers.
  1. Use of brackets: only when indicating a citation. Commas may be employed.
  1. Use of first person: third person is most appropriate for Social Science papers.

Do Not Use: I, MY, IN MY OPINION, I FEEL THAT, I THINK… This is too informal and weakens the point.

8. Do Not Use: IT SEEMS, IT LOOKS LIKE, IT MIGHT BE THAT… State clearly, positively, and decisively.

TOPICS

Psychology:

Criminality and Deviance

Motivation

Dreams

Trauma

Evolution of the human brain/mind

Ethics and Morality

Psychology of Adolescents

Personality types

Intelligence

Mental illness/wellness

Gender

Media

Placebo effect

Superstition
Psychology of determinism

Memory

Sociology:

Power and Social Structures

Schooling, governance, law enforcement, family

Gangs and Violence

Conformity

Sociology of ethics

Protest Movement

Mobs

Social Media

Sports

Cults

Gender

Media

(Cultural) Anthropology:

Religion and Rituals

Tribal Cultures

Technology and the Change of Canadian Culture

Pluralism and Issues in multicultural society

Honor Killings

Gender

Media

Witchcraft

Things to Remember When Writing

  • NO CONJUNCTIONS – don’t, can’t etc
  • Avoid using words over and over – especially in the same sentence. This is what your thesaurus is for.
  • Keep your plural and single nouns consistent
  • Watch your tenses! Make sure your entire essay is written in the same tense (past/present). If you are writing a history essay, it should be PAST TENSE. History happened already, we cannot talk about it as if it is occurring right now.
  • Avoid passivity. (eg “I think” or “could be” or “maybe” etc) Be forceful with your words. You are trying to convince your reader of your thesis. If you do not believe your thesis, why should your reader?
  • Avoid using quotations to introduce/conclude your paragraphs. This generally leads to a weak argument. It is important to come up with powerful introductory and concluding sentences on your own.
  • DON’T SAY “I” – “I think…” – I know you think that way or else you would not be writing it! Write in 3rd person.
  • Avoid “My paper” or “This paper will discuss…” once again, I know this paper will discuss that issue or else you would not be writing it.
  • Make sure you are using “affect” and “effect” properly!
  • When using numbers, write out numbers one to one hundred. Anything above that you may use numbers (eg 1945)
  • When referring to events such as World War One or World War Two, avoid WWI and WWII. Please write them out as indicated.
  • Use proper citations!
  • Format your works cited properly!
  • Edit your rough drafts!
  • HAND IN ALL OF YOUR ROUGH NOTES AND DRAFT COPIES!

PEER EVALUATION OF ISU

AUTHOR NAME______EVALUATOR______

INTRODUCTION / -topic is thoroughly summarized with general statements
-each main point is outlined in a separate sentence
-main issues are clear
-interesting; of sufficient length / /2
TOPIC / -topic is clear and specific
-topic is last sentence in introduction / /1
BODY
EVIDENCE / -evidence thoroughly supports main points and thesis
-evidence relevant and reflects current research on topic: essay is approx 1500-2000 wds in length
-evidence presented in an organized manner / /20
ARGUMENTS / -arguments are unified and cohesive.
-arguments clear, assertive, expand and support thesis thoroughly / /20
SYNTHESIS/ ANALYSIS / -thorough analysis of information set in excellent order which flows from argument to argument / /15
WRITING
MECHANICS / -flawless sentence structure, spelling, grammar and punctuation / /5
STYLE / -fluid readability, exemplary variety of sentencing and coherence / /5
PARAGRAPHING / -paragraphs are unified, structurally perfect, dealing thoroughly with one topic in a complete, unified argument / /5
CONCLUSION / -clearly summarizes key arguments
-unified; connects to thesis
-includes reflection and considerable insight on topic / /2
DOCUMENTATION
RESEARCH / -excellent breadth of knowledge of main authorities on subject
-research is current and sufficient to thoroughly support thesis / /10
CITATION / -thorough citation information provided
-format correct, MLA method / /10
WORKS CITED PAGE / -works cited format is flawless
-all sources used in paper are correctly listed
-all sources cited appear in paper / /5
TOTAL / /100

EVALUATION OF ISU ESSAY:HSP 3U1

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NAME______

INTRODUCTION / -topic is thoroughly summarized with general statements
-each main point is outlined in a separate sentence
-main issues are clear
-interesting; of sufficient length / /2
THESIS / -topic is clear and specific
-topic is last sentence in introduction / /1
BODY
EVIDENCE / -evidence thoroughly supports main points and topic
-evidence relevant and reflects current research on topic: essay is approx 1500-2000 wds in length
-evidence presented in an organized manner / /20
ARGUMENTS / -arguments are unified and cohesive.
-arguments clear, assertive, expand and support thesis thoroughly / /20
SYNTHESIS/ ANALYSIS / -thorough analysis of information set in excellent order which flows from argument to argument / /15
WRITING
MECHANICS / -flawless sentence structure, spelling, grammar and punctuation / /5
STYLE / -fluid readability, exemplary variety of sentencing and coherence / /5
PARAGRAPHING / -paragraphs are unified, structurally perfect, dealing thoroughly with one topic in a complete, unified argument / /5
CONCLUSION / -clearly summarizes key arguments
-unified; connects to thesis
-includes reflection and considerable insight on topic / /2
DOCUMENTATION
RESEARCH / -excellent breadth of knowledge of main authorities on subject
-research is current and sufficient to thoroughly support thesis / /10
CITATION / -thorough citation information provided
-format correct, MLA method / /10
WORKS CITED PAGE / -works cited format is flawless
-all sources used in paper are correctly listed
-all sources cited appear in paper / /5
TOTAL / /100

Peer Critique Sheet: 1 form for each presentation you watch

Name of Presenter:______
Name of Evaluator:______
Presentation (1 – needs lots of improvement, 10 – outstanding)
Creativity 12345678910
Accuracy 12345678910
Research12345678910
Presentation12345678910
Communication 12345678910
Positive element of the presentation:
Something this person can work on for next time:
Name of Presenter:______
Name of Evaluator:______
Presentation (1 – needs lots of improvement, 10 – outstanding)
Creativity 12345678910
Accuracy 12345678910
Research12345678910
Presentation12345678910
Communication 12345678910
Positive element of the presentation:
Something this person can work on for next time:
Name of Presenter:______
Name of Evaluator:______
Presentation (1 – needs lots of improvement, 10 – outstanding)
Creativity 12345678910
Accuracy 12345678910
Research12345678910
Presentation12345678910
Communication 12345678910
Positive element of the presentation:
Something this person can work on for next time:
Visual / Relevance- visuals are irrelevant and take away from presentation, or there are no visuals at all / Relevance- some visuals are relevant and contribute a small amount to the presentation / Relevance- most visuals are relevant and greatly contribute to the presentation / Relevance- all visuals are clearly relevant to topic and significantly contribute to the presentation, each in a different way / /3
Adequate Explanation- no explanation accompanies visuals / Adequate Explanation- little explanation of visuals, or comments are not relevant to topic / Adequate Explanation- gives complete explanation of visuals and shows how they relate to topic / Adequate Explanation- gives complete explanation of visuals and their relevant, as well as offers personal insight on them / 4
Total Marks:
/10 / Appearance- no agreement between font and background; information almost impossible to read and font is too small / Appearance- there is some contrast between font and background, but information is still difficult to see / Appearance-there is good contrast between font and background so that the text is clear and stands out; font size is appropriate / Appearance- font is clear and appropriately sized, background and style shows innovation, everything is well organized and in proportion / /3
Elocution
Total Marks:
/5 / Clarity-there is great difficulty in understanding what the speaker is saying / Clarity- shows a fair degree of clarity in speech, but there is some difficulty understanding / Clarity- communicates with a high degree of clarity and there is little or no difficulty understanding; some practice is evident / Clarity-displays a high degree of clarity and communicates in a way that it is easy to understand what is being said; shows clear signs of practice, avoids time filling words (ummm, ughh, ect.) / /5
Class Involvement / Peer Critique- has little or no good feedback (both positive and/or constructive) for each presentation viewed. / Peer Critique- has some feedback (both positive and constructive) for each presentation viewed. / Peer Critique-has good feedback (both positive and constructive) for each presentation viewed. / Peer Critique- has excellent, clear, concise feedback (both positive and constructive) for each presentation viewed. / /10
Total Marks:
/15 / Originality- no originality, boring, no class involvement / Originality- little creativity used in presenting information / Originality- interesting, presented in a fairly new way, relevant, / Originality- very interesting, unique, related to topic, promotes class participation, extremely relevant / /5
Content / Mechanics- several grammar and spelling errors / Mechanics- few grammar and spelling errors / Mechanics- no spelling or grammar errors / Mechanics-proper use of language, relevant and supports argument / /5
Topic- topic is not stated, nor are the main points / Topic- topic is not stated but main points are briefly mentioned / Topic- Topic is stated / Topic- topic is stated and an in depth explanation is included / /5
Argument- are illogical and do not relate to the topic. Arguments display a lack of research / Argument-are somewhat logical in relation to the topic. Shows moderate degree of research / Argument-are logical and relate to the topic. Shows large amount of research / Argument- all arguments progress in a logical manner directly related to the topic, and supports it from a multitude of angles. Arguments clearly show an extended amount of research. / /10
Total Marks:
/ 25 / Conclusion- topic and main points are not restated or proven / Conclusion- topic is restated but not proven / Conclusion- topic is restated and proven / Conclusion- topic is restated and further explained to prove it, using main points / /5
Knowledge and
Understanding
Total Marks:
/10 / Speaker has little to no knowledge of what is being presented; displays this by reading off of smartboard or notes / Speaker has limited knowledge of the topic; displays this by referring to notes often / Speaker has proper knowledge of topic being presented; displays this by rarely referring to notes / Speakers exceeds required knowledge of topic they are presenting; displays this by making no reference to notes / /10
Organization-
Total Marks:
/5 / Coherence- arguments show a lack of unity and are presented in an illogical manner, so that the audience has trouble following / Coherence- arguments show a fair amount of unity but some are out of sequence / Coherence- arguments are all unified under thesis and presented in a logical sequence / Coherence- arguments are unified and presented in a way that facilitates the audience’s understanding / /5

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