EN112

BMCC Winter,2010

Melis

Feedback on Essay #3 (documented research)

READER:______WRITER: ______

  1. What’s the topic of this paper?
  1. How does the writer try to get your attention in the introduction? (If it does not work yet, make a suggestion):
  1. What’s the writer’s thesis/controlling idea that frames his or her research on this issue? (Summarize, or quote)
  1. What evidence (data, research, etc.) supports this thesis? Give a list from the paper:
  1. How does this essay address alternative opinion(s)? What is an alternative or opposing opinion?
  1. How is the paper’s expression? It everything clear? Is the tone sufficiently academic? Did you find any words that need to be changed (slang) or explained (jargon or technical term) ?
  1. Are there enough (5 required) sources used in the paper? Are they always clearly separated from the writer’s ideas?
  1. Did you find any information in the draft that possible came from a source, but the source was not cited? What is it?
  1. What did you learn from this draft? Also explain the significance of this information in your life: How does the information you just accessed change the way you see things or think about things?
  1. Ask three questions from the writer. What would you as a reader want to hear more about this topic? (This does not necessarily mean that your writer will have to do more research):

INTRODUCTION (context +background+definitions)
1=not yet / 2=needs a lot of work / 3=needs some work / 4=good / 5=excellent
THESIS (it is clear, easy to remember and helpfully frames the whole essay)
1=not yet / 2=needs a lot of work / 3=needs some work / 4=good / 5=excellent
RESEARCH (informative and well documented)
1=not yet / 2=needs a lot of work / 3=needs some work / 4=good / 5=excellent
ORGANIZATION (this essay has a logical outline; the paragraphs and sentences are linked and flow well) / 2=needs a lot of work / 3=needs some work / 4=good / 5=excellent
1=not yet / 2=needs a lot of work / 3=needs some work / 4=good / 5=excellent
EXPRESSION (this essay is written well in an academic tone and does not have many striking errors)
1=not yet / 2=needs a lot of work / 3=needs some work / 4=good / 5=excellent

SUBJECTIVE RESPONSE (this essay is informative; I learned something by reading it)

1=not yet / 2=it’s getting there / 3=moderately so / 4=quite so / 5=absolutely